I always end up reading through quickly first to find out what’s happening, since I hate suspense! 😀 Then I can relax and go through it again to take in the scene captures more slowly. The drama keeps picking up!! Expressions are great as always. It’s also neat to see one of her kids making an appearance in this chapter! 🙂
1__what (Sunplay) said … the child’s matter-of-fact question feeds us pertinent backstory information without beating us over the head with it. Well-played.
2__I just discovered this story, & I was wondering, do you have a set schedule for posting new pages, or am I better off revisiting your site at random? I’m looking forward to what you have in store for us.
Hi DMC,
Yeah, Charlotte’s ex-husband will be a problem for her and her family going forward. And for Kurt.
No, I don’t have a posting schedule right now. I just finish a chapter and post it. Takes about a month. I’m thinking about going on a schedule–just posting whatever I have done once a week, but I’m not sure at this point.
Glad you’re enjoying the story, and I’m grateful for your support! 🙂
Your prompt response is appreciated, Good Sir.
If it helps you with your decision, I’d suggest reviewing how frequently you post, & how much, in order to get a rough idea of what you might reasonably produce on a weekly schedule, then plan to devote about 90% to your weekly output, & the rest to a “buffer”. If you’re able to stay 2-or-3 weeks ahead of us, you’ll be better prepared for whatever glitches that “Murphy’s Law” might throw at you.
After I finish “Sophia” I think I’m going to move to a more open format, without chapters. That way I can post whatever I have weekly. Very much appreciate your interest.
And that’s a good reason to always hold on to your store reciepts, not just for taxes, but for your alibi during police investigations. The suspense is building and the pacing is just right. We feel for her as a character wrongly accused. This is a really good story,, each chapter building on the previous one, and slowly introducing more mayhem and conflict. The subtle backstory, is the perfect amount of exposition, it helps frame the present events, and offers potential foreshadowing for what is to come later. There is clearly evident writing craft here.
I thought of the receipt too, but didn’t want to get bogged down in details. I actually cut a lot out of this chapter because it was just running too long.
I’m so glad you’re enjoying the story and your comments are always encouraging. Thanks!
Poor Charlotte. I know what it’s like to be accused of something you didn’t do. Fells like the walls are closing in. She’s really cute and vulnerable here.
Doesn’t Charlotte watch TV? LOL He never showed her any ID or anything. And why haven’t they reported Sophia’s behavior to anyone, yet? (I think I’ve watched waaaaayyyyy too many FBI, CSI, NCSI episodes. I trust no one!) As always, your attention to the lighting, expressions, and dialogue are perfect! The fact that they both thought that the police was there about her ex tells me that he is going to be a problem for all of them in the future. Might even be a problem for Kurt too. I really like seeing her son in the end of the chapter and her making them dinner – fleshes out her character even more. Great job, David!
Your always calling me out on details, Miss K! 🙂 In fact I had considered the badge but a) couldn’t find one in the store that I was willing to pay for this one scene, and b) didn’t want to slow down the story with a “May I see your badge?” thing, though it would have been authentic. Thanks, so much for the kind words.
16 thoughts on “Sophia 15 “Fingered””
Blue
I always end up reading through quickly first to find out what’s happening, since I hate suspense! 😀 Then I can relax and go through it again to take in the scene captures more slowly. The drama keeps picking up!! Expressions are great as always. It’s also neat to see one of her kids making an appearance in this chapter! 🙂
David
Thanks so much, Blue. Things are about to go sideways for Madam Sophia.
Sunplay
I like how they both assume it has something to do with Charlotte’s ex! 🙂
David
They have good reason!
January
It’s nice to see a glimpse of her home/family life. Love the shot of her starting supper in the kitchen. Makes her character 3 dimensional.
David
Thank you!
🙂
DMC_Run
1__what (Sunplay) said … the child’s matter-of-fact question feeds us pertinent backstory information without beating us over the head with it. Well-played.
2__I just discovered this story, & I was wondering, do you have a set schedule for posting new pages, or am I better off revisiting your site at random? I’m looking forward to what you have in store for us.
David
Hi DMC,
Yeah, Charlotte’s ex-husband will be a problem for her and her family going forward. And for Kurt.
No, I don’t have a posting schedule right now. I just finish a chapter and post it. Takes about a month. I’m thinking about going on a schedule–just posting whatever I have done once a week, but I’m not sure at this point.
Glad you’re enjoying the story, and I’m grateful for your support! 🙂
DMC_Run
Your prompt response is appreciated, Good Sir.
If it helps you with your decision, I’d suggest reviewing how frequently you post, & how much, in order to get a rough idea of what you might reasonably produce on a weekly schedule, then plan to devote about 90% to your weekly output, & the rest to a “buffer”. If you’re able to stay 2-or-3 weeks ahead of us, you’ll be better prepared for whatever glitches that “Murphy’s Law” might throw at you.
David
After I finish “Sophia” I think I’m going to move to a more open format, without chapters. That way I can post whatever I have weekly. Very much appreciate your interest.
Bill
And that’s a good reason to always hold on to your store reciepts, not just for taxes, but for your alibi during police investigations. The suspense is building and the pacing is just right. We feel for her as a character wrongly accused. This is a really good story,, each chapter building on the previous one, and slowly introducing more mayhem and conflict. The subtle backstory, is the perfect amount of exposition, it helps frame the present events, and offers potential foreshadowing for what is to come later. There is clearly evident writing craft here.
David
Hi FB, welcome to the site!
I thought of the receipt too, but didn’t want to get bogged down in details. I actually cut a lot out of this chapter because it was just running too long.
I’m so glad you’re enjoying the story and your comments are always encouraging. Thanks!
Falcon
Poor Charlotte. I know what it’s like to be accused of something you didn’t do. Fells like the walls are closing in. She’s really cute and vulnerable here.
David
Thanks! <3
Kirsten
Doesn’t Charlotte watch TV? LOL He never showed her any ID or anything. And why haven’t they reported Sophia’s behavior to anyone, yet? (I think I’ve watched waaaaayyyyy too many FBI, CSI, NCSI episodes. I trust no one!) As always, your attention to the lighting, expressions, and dialogue are perfect! The fact that they both thought that the police was there about her ex tells me that he is going to be a problem for all of them in the future. Might even be a problem for Kurt too. I really like seeing her son in the end of the chapter and her making them dinner – fleshes out her character even more. Great job, David!
David
Your always calling me out on details, Miss K! 🙂 In fact I had considered the badge but a) couldn’t find one in the store that I was willing to pay for this one scene, and b) didn’t want to slow down the story with a “May I see your badge?” thing, though it would have been authentic. Thanks, so much for the kind words.